My name is Deng Guojun. My English name is Jason. I study in Changping No.1 Primary School. I’m in Class 2, Grade 4. My school is beautiful. There is a big playground in my school. There are many trees around the playground. The canteen is near the playground. There is a library on the fourth floor. We can read books in the library. The music room, the art room and the computer room are on the fourth floor, too. My classroom is on the third floor. It’s big and nice. I like my school very much. Welcome to my school!(四（2）班   邓国君,指导老师：谭焕娟)
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这篇作文的题目是“我的学校”，是一篇介绍学校的作文。小作者开门见山，首先介绍了自己的姓名，在哪里读书，然后介绍了自己学校有什么设施，最后说出自己对学校的感觉。