It was my birthday. When I came back home, there was a big surprise. That was a new computer. Dad told me that I could learn knowledge from the computer. It’s really a big surprise. It changed my life.
It’s interesting to make friends with someone I don’t know them. I have a lot of friends now. We always send e-mails to each other.
It’s so amazing to go around the computer world. I can know culture of other countries, and I have different feelings. When it’s summer here, I can see the snow view from the internet. It’s really a magic world. I don’t need to go out of my room, but I can know all the news.
Because of computer my life became colorful. Because of computer I learned a lot of knowledge. Because of computer I came into a magic world. （六（4）罗婷,指导教师：许彤）
点评：本文立意新颖，生日当天回家看到爸爸给买的生日礼物，是一台电脑，然后分别写了有了电脑以后的生活改变。写出电脑让生活变得更加有趣，更加惊喜，更加神奇。语言很生动、用词准确。