Hello, everyone! I am Tina. I am a lovely girl. I am 11 years old. My favourite seasons are summer and winter.
In summer, it's always sunny and hot. I can wear my nice skirts and dresses. I can swim in the sea, too. The sky is very blue. The clouds are white. The city is very beautiful.
Winter comes. It's white everywhere in my hometown. In winter, it's windy, snowy and cold. But I have a very good time in winter. I can ski. I can skate. I can make a snowman and play games in the snow, too. Oh, I am very happy!
How I love summer and winter!（长安镇第一小学 （2）班 杨汶珏,指导教师：林晓文）
点评：文章很清晰的写出不同季节的不同天气，以及应该穿的衣服，可以做的事情。而且语法正确，用词丰富。